如果用中文的思维方式起草，雅思写作的文章完成度会很低，尤其是加上一些似是而非的高级词汇，会导致中国人看不明白，外国人也读不懂。克服这种窘境的唯一方法就是分清英文同义词的细微差别。

　　在正式开始背单词前，首先要注意的，就是虽然有些词汇在雅思写作的使用中存在“交集”，但并不意味着在任何场合都可以无条件替换。
 

　　Writing Topic 3:

　　Developments in technology are causing many environmental problems. Some people think that people should choose a simpler way of life. Others think that we should use technology to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
 

　　题干理解：

　　科技进步造成了环境问题。有人认为应该简单生活(少用科技)，而其他人认为应该用科技来解决环境问题。讨论双方观点，给出自己的意见。
 

　　学生习作：

　　Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerning about growing environmental issues resulted from the application of modern technology. However, whether we should continue to utilize the technology has caused a heated debate. My view is that to exploit new technology has its weakness but its importance should not be denied.
 

　　评论：

　　concern作为动词表示“关心、关注”使用时往往以被动式出现，即be concerned with/about。issue是一个中性的词，可以是好事也可以是坏事。用在这里不能清晰表达problem的负面含义。有些同学可能会用dilemma来替换problem, 殊不知前者指的是“进退两难的境地”，并不能与environmental搭配。作者用application, utilize等词简单地替换了use(使用)，但是无法突出“过度使用”科技所带来的后果。Weakness的含义过于笼统，并不能清楚交代科技所带来的问题具体是什么。deny表示“矢口否认”，“不承认”的意思。而作者想表达的意思应该是ignore, neglect(忽视，忽略)。由此可见，很多同学对一些“熟词”词义掌握得不够精准，导致南辕北辙。
 

　　修改过后：

　　Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the growing threat posed by the abuse of modern technology. The issue of whether we should continue to rely on technology to ease the situation has been frequently raised in public and scholarly discourses. My view is that despite of the harms caused by modern technology, we should never overlook its importance in exploiting new energies and securing ecosystems around the world.
 

　　再评论：

　　problem可以替换成threat, danger, damage, 后面加过去分词进行修饰：brought by, caused by, posed by(由……所带来、导致的)。abuse表示“滥用”，这个词增加了表达的严谨性。潜台词是：合理使用科技不会带来这些问题。ease the situation这一指代巧妙地避开了solve environmental problem这个重复出现的关键词，使行文更简练。public and scholarly discourses是比较正式的表达，需要根据题目类型酌情使用。

　　despite of表示让步，体现观点的辩证性。最后提出自己的观点，即全文核心论点时，将讨论范围明确固定在new energies和ecosystem范围内，既使观点更加清晰具体，又为下文主题段展开做好了铺垫。另外注意动词exploit与secure的动宾搭配。

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